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作者: ggid1d 时间: 2012-7-11 05:50
标题: 9分范文一篇
本帖最后由 ggid1d 于 2012-7-11 05:50 编辑

Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community. They believe this would benefit both the individual teenager and society as a whole.
Do you agree or disagree?

Many young people work on a volunteer basis, and this can only be beneficial for both the individual and society as a whole. However, I do not agree that we should therefore force all teenagers to do unpaid work.

Most young people are already under enough pressure with their studies, without being given the added responsibility of working in their spare time. School is just as demanding as a full-time job, and teachers expect their students to do homework and exam revision on top of attending lessons every day. When young people do have some free time, we should encourage them to enjoy it with their friends or to spend it doing sports and other leisure activities. They have many years of work ahead of them when they finish their studies.

At the same time, I do not believe that society has anything to gain from obliging young people to do unpaid work. In fact, I would argue that it goes against the values of a free and fair society to force a group of people to do something against their will. Doing this can only lead to resentment amongst young people, who would feel that they were being used, and parents, who would not want to be told how to raise their children. Currently, nobody is forced to volunteer, and this is surely the best system.

In conclusion, teenagers may choose to work for free and help others, but in my opinion we should not make this compulsory.

(250 words, band 9)

作者: alvinshen28 时间: 2012-7-19 13:49

作者: 孤单南半球 时间: 2012-7-25 14:14
不少语法错误哦

作者: ggid1d 时间: 2012-7-29 00:43

孤单南半球发表于 2012-7-25 14:14
不少语法错误哦

真的假的喔？雅思考官写的

作者: andyashura 时间: 2012-8-23 13:20
谢谢分享了我拿走欣赏去哈哈

作者: ethanqld 时间: 2012-9-19 20:04
不觉得有9分可能也就7分的样子没有举例论证力度一般总是在讲大道理

作者: ggid1d 时间: 2012-9-23 18:59

ethanqld 发表于 2012-9-19 20:04
不觉得有9分可能也就7分的样子没有举例论证力度一般总是在讲大道理

专家，你几分？

作者: ethanqld 时间: 2012-9-25 22:13
8分几年前移民时候考的你也不用叫我专家，就写个雅思作文有什么专家的

作者: ggid1d 时间: 2012-9-26 16:43

ethanqld 发表于 2012-9-25 22:13
8分几年前移民时候考的你也不用叫我专家，就写个雅思作文有什么专家的

莫装逼，被雷劈。

作者: ethanqld 时间: 2012-9-28 14:59
不装逼啊，考试的东西就是为了考试去考试。简单啊。

作者: ethanqld 时间: 2012-9-28 15:01
只怪你自己的称呼太白痴。你莫非就希望我说我考个7分。6分的。然后没有资格评价你的文章。不好意思，我是拿着8分的写作文章去新东方应聘的10多年前。

作者: ggid1d 时间: 2012-9-30 16:34

ethanqld 发表于 2012-9-28 15:01
只怪你自己的称呼太白痴。你莫非就希望我说我考个7分。6分的。然后没有资格评价你的文章。不好意思，我是拿 ...

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